Yes, that's precisely the word! "Lifeless." Like a trap with no mechanism attached.
I tried writing it to be freer at first. It simply was more effort than it was worth. Tanka may be an unnecessary stress, but at least with the syllable count it was easier to understand what sort of words went where. Perhaps that's the issue?
[ she's... honestly not sure she's ever heard anything like that before. not directed at her, at least. it takes her a minute or two to actually respond. ]
If you're certain, then. I'll bring an even better one next time!
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I tried writing it to be freer at first.
It simply was more effort than it was worth.
Tanka may be an unnecessary stress, but at least with the syllable count it was easier to understand what sort of words went where.
Perhaps that's the issue?
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But I've always felt there was a a certain value to those skills that came naturally, too.
It doesn't hurt to have a few learned skills, I guess...
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If you write anything else, let me know, I'd love to see it.
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Are you sure?
Really and truly?
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If you're certain, then.
I'll bring an even better one next time!
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[Is this what it's like to mentor the next generation of poets?
It's not bad. It feels good, actually.]